Soldier boy jack

well i have read about half your story now, i think its got a good story line i'll make sure i read the rest when i'm not in a lesson ...

hmm not much more to say really. keep up the good work though

i agree with the other commenters, but i think that you really need to write more on this story. But aways remember never let anyone put you down on your ...

thanks for the help on grammar

okay can anyone write anymore than the last two peeps but they said it all good storyline

yeah i agree with green_river i loved this

what more can i say i dreamed it i made it into a script then you came and made it a whole lot better thanks so much i owe alot ...

yeah i would read it if you put the story on in smaller parts its just with a big thing like that not many people bother to read it

yeah same here

thanks i'll keep that it in mind

on the whole its really good as before you need to work on grammar but i can't say much as my grammar is terrible as you can see but i ...

thanks again for the help but i'm going to blame it all on my English classes because we never get to work on grammar.

thanks roxanner but i normally write storys about boys as the main character and around my age but this time i wanted to push the boat out further

don't let people put you down keep trying and you will get there

umm i love it what more can anybody say? never ever stop making great storys like this or everyone will get very bord lol